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Post by Chels on Aug 21, 2004 15:56:25 GMT -5
woah really GOOD!! can't wait to see what happens!!
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Post by xXxSweetHunnyxXx on Aug 21, 2004 16:00:47 GMT -5
this story is soooo good! keep going!! =)
xoxo
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Post by {*Kiss_Me_Now*} on Aug 21, 2004 17:22:54 GMT -5
plz keep it coming!  |
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Post by {*Kiss_Me_Now*} on Aug 21, 2004 17:25:57 GMT -5
your story is sooooo good! keep writing |
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Post by OxGreenEydGurlxO on Aug 21, 2004 17:51:48 GMT -5
[glow=limegreen,2,300]Chapter 9
At the end of the day me and Jessica just decided to walk by ourselves without Jeremy. I had spanish, my last cla$$, with Jeremy and Jessica. Jessica tried to talk to him but he wouldn't listen.
"Youre going to have to talk to him sooner or later." Jessica said as we walked to my house to get my stuff.
"I know, but I dont know what to say." I replied as I kicked a rock on the sidewalk.
"Just tell him the truth. Sit him down and tell him your mad at him and that you couldnt say no to Jo because you didnt want to hurt his feelings." She said as we reached my house.
"I guess youre right." I said as I opened the door and me and her walked into my room. I grabbed some clothes and put them into my backpack. Then we walked back to her house.
When we opened up the door Jeremy was sitting on the couch watching TV. He smiled at me and I couldnt help it but, I smiled back. I followed Jessica up to her room and she turned on her Hilary Duff CD (lol Im listening to it right now).
"Go down stairs and just tell him you need to talk." Jessica said. I hesitated and then stood up. I opened her door and slowly walked down stairs.
"Jeremy can I talk to you for a second?" I asked as I walked over to the couch.
"Sure." He replied patting a place next to him for me to sit down. I did and turned to face him.
"Why are you going to the dance with Katie?" I asked.
"Because, I like her." He replied.
"So, you lied yesterday?"
"NO...Okay Alyssa you want the truth?" He asked. I shook my head yes.
"I heard Jo ask you to the dance and it made me mad because I was going to ask you later today. So, I asked Katie." He said bringing his voice down into a whisper, "And even though I've only know you for 2 days I really like you." I spoke the same way.
"Before I heard you ask Katie I told Jo I couldnt go with him because I might go with someone else and I relly like you too. It broke my heart to see you and Katie making out in front of me. Jeremy, youre the first guy to ever make me cry." I replied choking back the tears and I looked down at the ground. He took his hand and put it under my chin to make me look at him in the eyes.
"Alyssa, I never intended to hurt you." He whispered and leaned in and kissed me more pa$$ionatly than earlier that morning. I smiled and left to go talk to Jessica.
"Now I need to figure out how to break it off with Katie again." Jeremy mumbled to himself as I walked up the stairs.
This is really short but Im winging it lol. I have no idea what to write anymore lol. Any more ideas?
*~Alyssa~* [/glow]
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Post by Arwen07 on Aug 21, 2004 19:00:32 GMT -5
It's getting really good, but i dont' have any ideas. Sry.
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Post by OxGreenEydGurlxO on Aug 21, 2004 20:09:33 GMT -5
[shadow=purple,left,300]Chapter 10
I walked into Jessicas room with a big smile on my face.
"I take it, it went well." She said smiling.
"I shook my head and sat down on her bed.
"What happened?" She asked looking interested.
"I did what you said. I told him the truth." I replied.
"So is he going to--" She was cut off by a knock on the door.
"Can I come in?" Jeremy asked on the other side.
"Yea." Jessica said as the door opened.
"I'm going ovet to Katies to tell her I'm not going to go with her. If I'm not back in 5 minutes, wait longer." He said quoting Ace Ventura Pet Detective. Me and Jessica looked at eachother and laughed. He smiled and left.
"JESS! IM HOME!" Someone yeled from downstairs.
"Come on you can meet my other sister Gigi." Jessica said as me and her left to go downstairs.
"Gigi, this is Alyssa. Alyssa, this is my little sister Gigi." Jessica introduced us.
"Hey." I said and smiled. She smiled back.
"Mom wanted me to tell you that her and dad were staying at grandmas tonight and they wont be back till tomorrow evening." She said.
"Coolie." Jessica said as me and her did a high five.
With Jeremy
After Jeremy got to Katie's house he knocked on the door and Katie answered.
"Jeremy, What are you doing here?" She asked nervously.
"I came to talk to you, can I come in?" He asked. Katie looked around nervously inside for a second.
"Sure." She replied cautiously. She hesitated then opened up the door for him to walk in.
"Look Katie I came to tell you-" Jeremy started but was interupted by a mans voice.
"Katie! Hurry up!" The voice boomed from her bedroom.
"Who's that?" Jeremy asked starting to walk over to her bedroom.
"It's nobody." Katie said standing in front of Jeremy and her bedroom door so her couldnt go in. Just then the door opened and out came the football quarter back.
"Katie! What the Hell!" Jeremy yelled.
"Jeremy Im so sorry." Katie said.
"Whats this little b^tch doing here?" THe QB asked.
"Jeremy you should leave." Katie said.
"I will because I came to tell you that I decided to go to the dance with Alyssa and not you." He said as he turned around and made his way to the door.
"Good! Go with that little slut! I'm going with Bud(the QB) anyways!" She yelled as Jeremy slammed the door and made his way to his car.
"b^tch." He muttered.
Thanks for da reviews!!!!!
Alyssa
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Post by Selita on Aug 21, 2004 20:50:43 GMT -5
Hey I love da story but im in ontario right now and im leavin in 8 days to go back to newfoundland and i was hopin if u dont finish the story bt then i was thinkin maybe you could e-mail it to at selitagoosney@hotmail.com
loads of love,
Selita
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Post by OxGreenEydGurlxO on Aug 22, 2004 1:56:29 GMT -5
Sure thing |
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Post by Arwen07 on Aug 22, 2004 11:32:09 GMT -5
Keep it up gurl. It's getting good!
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Post by Chels on Aug 22, 2004 15:48:17 GMT -5
really good, write more soon!
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Post by Martina on Aug 23, 2004 13:07:27 GMT -5
can someone please post something?! I fell like it sucks a$$. lol Alyssa Your Story didn't suck it Just needs something more. |
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Post by OxGreenEydGurlxO on Aug 24, 2004 0:23:24 GMT -5
wut does it need?
Alyssa
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Post by xXxSweetHunnyxXx on Aug 24, 2004 0:33:53 GMT -5
i think itz great tha way it is.. keep going!! =)
xoxoxox
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Post by xoxonikki on Aug 24, 2004 11:34:08 GMT -5
ya its great, keep it coming
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thanx sarah!